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同等开云kaiyun(中国)历英语作文原文

Text Message

We can make a call with our mobile phones if we want anywhere， and for the science inventions and innovations， now we communicate others with text message. There are about 0.8 billion people who use mobile phone， and nearly everyone can make text message with his/her mobile phone.

Text message has some advantages. In the first place， it is cheap and convenient .Second， you can use it to tell somebody what you want to say if he or she can not answer an that moment. To some extent， it is not as harm to your health as calling.

It also has some disadvantages. For instance， some people use text message all day to communicate with others， and it really waste time. Some people can transmit virus by text message. Even a criminal can use it to cheat people， and crime happens. So you should not answer if you get a text message which you do not know who made

As far as I am concerned， text message has both advantages and disadvantages. In a word， you should use it positively. constantly but not frequently.

评语：得分9-11分

该文结构比较合理，语言使用较灵活，立意清晰明确，基本能够完成写作目的。

但是有个别的词语使用不当，具体阐述不是很深刻，希望在以后的写作练习中加以注意。